I’ve witnessed wonders wild beyond belief —
Not the least, life returned to One long dead.
I saw the cavity from whence he bled.
Confusion then relived the watch of grief.
I’d surveyed him hanging there beside the thief
The only thing he’d stole — my heart and head.
And in exchange he gave immortal bread
Took my shame, replaced it with relief.
Then three times he asked my love of me
Instructing me each while his lambs to feed
Locking eyes he said quite soberly
“Where you will not go, someone there shall lead.”
I saw then clearly my own destiny
And embraced the cross which waits in time for me.
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Writing 201: Poetry
Assignment — Day 10:
Prompt: Future
Form: Sonnet
Device: Chiasmus
Personal note: I managed the prompt and (hopefully) wrote a sonnet,
however the fascinatingly fun, turn-it-on-its-head chiasmus just would not deign to be incorporated into this poem. We shall have to revisit this device in the future! (Ha — future again!)
A note about the subject matter: while it may seem gloomy, embracing one’s cross is liberating. When I get “me” out of the way, I can serve God and others with an unconditional love.
Feb 27, 2015 @ 23:58:31
I liked it a lot ,so serene reading it on your lemon page, I only finished 9, what you didn’t do? sits fine with me, excellent Peter?
Feb 28, 2015 @ 07:06:17
Thanks for that! These assignments cost me a lot of sleep. Now I plan on catching up! 🙂
Feb 28, 2015 @ 04:17:40
heartfelt and love the message!
Feb 28, 2015 @ 07:01:53
Thanks so much. I am not a sonnet person. It was an assignment. But I do so identify with Peter! (That means I usually open my mouth first and think second.) 🙂
Feb 28, 2015 @ 06:29:02
Deep message! Well done Lore!
Feb 28, 2015 @ 07:03:42
Thanks, Aletta! I haven’t written many sonnets. Quite challenging. Thanks so much for your consistent reading and faithful comments! You encourage me so very much! 🙂
Feb 28, 2015 @ 07:24:17
You are so very talented!! 😀
Feb 28, 2015 @ 07:42:21
You are so generous. (and such a compliment coming from a super talented person herself!)
Feb 28, 2015 @ 13:58:56
😀
Feb 28, 2015 @ 15:08:21
Well done. Reading your poetry – and how well you managed each style – confirms what I already knew. You’re a gifted writer who wears many hats…and wears each with grace.
Feb 28, 2015 @ 16:41:00
Thanks. I love words, both reading and writing them. There is definitely a magic in them. Praise coming from you, a writer whom I hold in high esteem, is a treasure and an encouragement. Thank you!